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Innocent & Charmed

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How innocent she looked as she slept, her long black hair gracing the pillow effortlessly. Made him feel more guilty, as he thought about his mistress and the times he had spent with her instead of his beautiful wife, who had never complained. That evening, after ending things with his mistress, he came home with a bunch of roses and a basket of blueberry muffins, his wife's favorite. Instead of her, he saw a note on the bed, written in his wife's handwriting that she is leaving him for another man. He wished he knew then, what he knew now.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Innocence' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Write Tribe: 100 words on a Saturday.

Comments

  1. Wow what a crazy turn of affairs!!!
    Loved this one.

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  2. Wow! What a take on the prompt! Wonderful.

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  3. //He wished he knew then, what he knew now.// What a crisp expression, a lot could have been different if only he had known. Good one :)

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  4. Whoa! Your fiction leaves this inexplicable impression!!!

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  5. Ironic. But such is life... Loved it Soumya :)

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    1. Thank you! Yes, life is ironic at times :)

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  6. He finally had to pay for his infidelity!

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  7. When people dont deserve innocence and purity this is what nature does to even out things !

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  8. serves him right!! better late than never doesn't apply to everything!!

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  9. You have combined the two prompts effortlessly. :) Love it!

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  10. What goes round comes around....nice one Soumya.

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  11. This was actually a great ending - they all lived happily ever after :D

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    1. Hahaha yes. But we need to see if the mistress would take him back! :P

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  12. What a twist to the tale! A great take on the prompt.

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  13. Tit for tat! Serves him just right :).

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  14. Gosh!! Serves him right, actually! :)

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  15. He was a little late. Serves him right to lose her. ♥

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  16. Lol I don't feel sorry for him. I'm glad she walked away and moved on.

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  17. Bunch of roses and basket of blueberry muffins.... sigh, the imagery!! The alliteration is perfect and I was taken back to my Enid Blyton days <3

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  18. Okay he totally deserved that. And a perfect blend of prompts must say. Brilliant!! :D

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  19. Innocence + Adultery = Bad combo

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  20. A tit for tat thing. Lovely write :)

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  21. Love how you combined the two prompts! And well, no one is really ever innocent, are they? ;)

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  22. What goes around comes around. Brilliant!!!

    Read me here: http://wingardiumleviosaaa.blogspot.in/

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  23. Ha, serves him right! You go, girl! This was lovely :D Popping over from Write Tribe and it is nice to find your blog :)

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  24. Good for her ! Why can't she find love , when he has sought it outside ? He received what he deserved !

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  25. No more guilty, then? The things some people do :)
    Great story as usual :)

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  26. Oh! That's a tale with a twist! No guilt anymore and simply fab. I couldn't stop smiling:)
    http://vishalbheeroo.wordpress.com/2014/05/22/100-words-on-saturday-100-words-on-saturday-2014-14/

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