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Faded Page Of Life

Copyright – Kelly Sands

There was sunlight when you left and now the clouds above have given up too, just like me. Sometimes I wonder if I gave up too soon and then I think maybe not, since the decision to leave was solely yours. You wanted to go out and explore a new world, of which I clearly wasn't a part of, atleast that's what you proved when you left me with just a note. Today it doesn't hurt so much, as I have come to realize that I am worth more. Your name lies faded in some old page of my life.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Pages' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 11th July.

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  1. Time heals everything, give it some time :)

    Great composition :D

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  2. Oh my God, Soumya, when I saw the prompt for FSF, I had something like this in my mind. :p Good one babes :)

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  3. Beautiful Soumya :)
    Time is a healer :)

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  4. the writer is obviously coming to terms with the breakup - well written.
    A small point - you wrote 'of which I clearly wasn't a part off'' - which is one 'off' too many! :)

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    1. Thank you!

      And thank you for pointing it out, I have corrected it now :)

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  5. Awesome as always! Your stories are simple but are so beautiful and I love that!

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  6. It's incredible how you connect the simple word like page to such a creative tale. Commendable. Hats off!

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  7. Hi Soumya, I'm certainly not the first to give you this award, but here's something from me :)
    http://awanderingmindofabookaholic.blogspot.ae/2014/07/quintet-of-radiance-award.html

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    1. Thank you so much Aathira. You have been very kind :)

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  8. A nice poetic take on the prompt. Good job.

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  9. Give the time, some time :)
    Well written :)

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  10. Good one Soumya...we move on with the time.

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  11. This is excellent. Really stirs the soul.

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  12. stunning as alwez how have u been ?

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  13. This is simple, yet so indulging! I love how you can bring emotions out in the reader :)

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  14. Nice.. Simple yet so beautiful.. :)

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  15. Impeccable beautiFICTION ! :) Soumya, you have a special knack of creating beautiful magic with your fiction. I loved the words and the last line especially was awesome.

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  16. I'm so glad! She deserved someone better :) You have done a fabulous work, as always, in expressing the character's thoughts so beautifully.

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  17. Just a note? Well, then goodbye and good luck.

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  18. These few lines spoke it all ....beautifully expressed .....loved it :)

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  19. Sweet and simple. Very well done.

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  20. Nice piece... but what went wrong that she only left a note? was she that immature - and did you not wish to see who she really was? It is not that deep a wound. Let the clouds be your guide as sunny days return anew.

    I'm feeling a little philosophical.... got any m and m's? Randy

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    1. You probably did not get the story right. He left her without telling her anything. He just left a goodbye note, it sure is a deep wound.

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  21. Soumya, Well written. At least she's now put that terrible hurt in her past and is moving on which is a sign she's healed. Good for her. Good story and well done. :) ---Susan

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  22. This made me a fan of yours! Too good.

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  23. 'Your name lies faded in some old pages of my life' ...very nice...bad experiences should indeed be erased.:)

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  24. Loved how you connected the two prompts in one! Beautiful Leo!

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  25. Good that the bad memory has faded away :) Your females are very strong, Soumya :)

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