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Falling Forever

Copyright- The Reclining Gentleman

I can feel the chill in the air as we sit and watch the still water, our hands entwined with each other. This place is serene and gives me immense peace, or maybe it is just the effect of being around you; since I gush like a child and feel pretty as a woman when you fail to take your eyes off me. It has been fifty years now and the feeling is still the same. And so is the magic. Fifty years ago, it was at this place that I realized that I had fallen in love with you.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Falling' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 24th October.

Comments

  1. Tender and lovely.. a nice comforting feeling of contentedness...

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  2. I wish it weren't fiction ;-) Wouldnt it be nice to have it happen :-)

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  3. You have some beautiful sentiments here. I, personally, think the story would be stronger if you broke up a couple of the long sentences and submitted something shorter for your 5-sentence challenge. Still, the essence is there and is as beautiful as young love grown strong with the weathering of the years.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

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  4. Dear Soumya, Lovely story full of love. Such a romantic tale - I love it! Nan :)

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