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Fresh Love

© Copyright Jean L. Hays

Today is the first day of the year and I'm up with the sun all set for my morning walk. I slowly walk along the road, basking in the mild heat and hoping for a fresh start to the year. Just as I reached the cross road, I saw someone walking in the opposite direction and talking continuously on the phone. Tall, dark and handsome, he was sweating profusely and yet managed to look breathtakingly handsome. He gave me a quick look and a smile escaped his lips; and there it was, the first glimpse of my first love story.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Fresh' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 9th January 2015.

Comments

  1. What a perfect start to the year :) I hope the love remains fresh forever!

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  2. So nice.. and what a great contrast to Janet's story :-)

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  3. Let's hope it's the start of something, not just a new year. (BTW - I think you change tense half way through...)
    Claire

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  4. ...is it wrong to be jealous of a character? Lol

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  5. Soumya, this " the first glimpse of my first love story" makes me think she met and fell in love more than once before meeting Mr. Right. But who knows? :-)

    janet

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    1. That was my intention. I did not want to promise a future here :)

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  6. I like the way you embedded new year into the text. A word of warning to your author-protagonist: the character uses his phone too much, he sweats, and he smiles too easily. And he's too pretty! He could end up as a wimp.

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  7. One fine morning everybody wishes for ;) Well jotted! Indeed seems like a fresh start :)

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  8. Oh, I loved this! "the first glimpse of my first love story." :)

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  9. Sounds like a great beginning to the year. I'm guessing this doesn't take place anywhere near me, since it is about -35 C with the windchill so no one would be sweating. :) It's much nicer in India, I'm sure.
    -David

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    1. Such things do not happen in India often too. Just in the mind :)

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  10. Impressive take and apt for the new year!

    Btw love, I have tagged you to take up Blogadda's "Blog for #UseYourAnd and Take a Stand" activity in my post. You were the person who jumped to my mind on seeing it the first time. Hope you like taking it up. :)

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  11. Ah, a new beginning in the new Year. ;) Good job on the prompt.

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