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The Open Balcony

Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The open balcony was inviting me and I knew that I could catch a glimpse of the entire estate from there. The tall gate was locked and I peep inside to see if anyone was around. After being sure that no one was inside, I kick my shoes in the air, tie my hair high up and climb up the railing. I have never been in such a big house before, even if from outside on an empty balcony. The view was beautiful, but I had to hurry back before my father, the gardener of the estate finds me here.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Open' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 13th February 2015.

Comments

  1. It indeed looks to be a beautiful balcony.

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  2. I did not expect the twist at the end that took the story to a different level.Brilliant!

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  3. Little dreams of a little girl. Nice fiction!

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  6. Dear Soumya,

    A little girl who dreams big. Sweet story.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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  7. Sounds like something I would have done when I was young. I think you captured the youth of the young girl fabulously.

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  8. Simple pleasures wonderfully captured. I like it that the protagonist is a girl :)

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  9. Such a simple want but big dreams, nicely done!

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  10. simple pleasures of life :) beautifully written

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  11. Too bad she wasn't brave enough to ask her father, the gardener for a better and closer view without worry of getting caught trespassing. ;) <3

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