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"Oh you believe in all this?", I asked Naman as he walked me towards the wishing well, in the middle of the jungle.
"No harm in trying right", he smiled as he handed me a coin and asked me to close my eyes to make a wish.
I closed my eyes and wished that Naman would forgive me for 'that' mistake. I did not intend on cheating on him, just that I was really drunk that day and Sahil happened to drop me home.
Before I could complete my wish, I felt Naman's hands on me pushing me into the well.
This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Wishes' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
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ReplyDeletethat was really interesting, pacy and dark! the ending was superb!
ReplyDeleteThank you Ankita!
DeleteOh my god! Soumya, you vixen! I never saw that coming. In my heart, I was praying that she would be forgiven and then that dramatic twist! You took my breath away. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you Shailaja! :)
Deletethis was awesome. well deserved.
ReplyDeleteThank you Red.
DeleteThe end was totally unexpected.
ReplyDeleteI was actually expecting to see--
Before I could complete my wish, I felt Naman's hands on me in a protective way and assured me, “Don’t worry so much about an accident. Just forget it as if it was a bad dream.”
Soumya, you like to take people on a roller coaster ride. Don’t you? ;)
You really have a way with feelings ! :)
Oh yes I do! :)
DeleteThank you!
OMG! You have managed a twist in the end and this is a surprise.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteUnexpected... But a very good read :)
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DeleteGosh! Soumya, you never fail to surprise me! What a twist :)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you liked it! :)
DeleteOoh!!! It did manage to terrify me in the end!!
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading Shilpa.
DeleteMakes me wonder, what if she's had the time to complete her wish? ;)
ReplyDeleteI love the twist though. Brilliant!
What if? :)
DeleteThank you!
aah that was something i didnt see coming!! naman should have listened to her! good one soumya :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Swathi! :)
DeleteI guessed the climax ;) good one as always.
ReplyDeleteSmart you! Thanks :)
DeleteLove the twist! :D
ReplyDeleteThank you! :)
DeleteOh my God.. didn't expect THAT twist! Forgiveness for cheating is one of the most debatable topics though.
ReplyDeleteDebatable yes. But I would never forgive a cheat. I'd do what Naman did.
DeleteHmm...Kinda deserved... Nice write up.
ReplyDeleteDeserved totally. Thanks Anita!
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DeleteThanks :)
ReplyDeletewow!! Nice take on the prompt Soumya.. :D
ReplyDeleteThanks Anu! :)
DeleteThought so, somethings are hard to let go. Nicely portrayed :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Keirthana :)
DeleteOh.... :( Somehow I expected forgiveness, despite knowing fully well that she deserved what she got... A wonderful twist you gave :)
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Thank you Sreeja!
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Oh...my it's just too good....a complete different end to what I expected :)
ReplyDeleteThat's just cruel! Nice twist.
ReplyDeleteShe deserved it. Thank you!
DeleteHaha perfect! ;)
ReplyDeleteThat ending! Woah :) Really good! Always a pleasure to read your stories!
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Deleteoh my god.. but WHy.. its better to move on then do this to another human being ..
ReplyDeletebut the twist in the post .. Loved it :)
Bikram
ohh... I like that twist in the end, very nice
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