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Our holiday home is situated between the mountains, enveloped by lush greenery and the smell of nature. This was the first time I was coming here after the divorce, something that I had not seen coming. I intended to punish him by killing myself in the very room where he made love to me for the first time, the same room where he had proposed. I look around, the house seems empty and devoid of emotions but suddenly I hear giggles. The innocent laughter of my children and the luminous smile on their faces, change my decision in a second.
This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Luminous' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 8th August.
Good, I'm happy she changed her decision. Why should she take her own life ? It's just that he doesn't deserve her. The children do, don't they ?
ReplyDeleteLuminous, this one !
The children definitely do. Thank Sreeja!
DeleteCrisp in powerful five sentences. Makes an impact.
ReplyDeleteThank you Hari!
DeleteGood decision. I also like when people combine two or more prompts :-)
ReplyDeleteThere maybe just one reason to die but a million reasons to live. I'm glad she did the right thing.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad too!
DeleteDear Soumyaa,
ReplyDeleteGlad the children's laughter changed her mind. Killing herself in every room would've proved difficult if not impossible. Nice one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle :)
DeleteLove that you changed .. a suicide always punish more than one person..
ReplyDeleteI agree. I loved your picture :)
DeleteNice one Soumyaa... Glad she changed her decision :)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad too, thank :)
DeleteLovely, the emotions! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteI thought my life was over when I got divorced. Then I realized he'd been making my life miserable for quite some time, and I was better off without him. He never cheated, he was just a very negative person who criticized me a lot more than he ever said anything kind about me. We did have three great kids together, and we were able to get along more civilly after the divorce.
ReplyDeleteI think your story probably rings true for a lot of people. I love the little picture too.
http://poetryofthenetherworld.blogspot.com/2014/08/l-is-for-luminous.html
I'm glad you sorted out the mess. Thanks for reading Wanda :)
DeleteI'm happy that the luminous smile on the faces of her children changed her decision.
ReplyDeleteMe too. Thanks for reading Ranu! :)
DeleteThank you! :)
ReplyDeleteThe emotions are brilliantly depicted...
ReplyDeleteGood one!
Thank you!
DeleteBad memories and good memories, only need to see which ones are the most important. Nice story!
ReplyDeleteThank you Elizabeth!
DeleteThat was nice, Soumya!
ReplyDeleteThank you Shilpa!
DeletePhew! Happy ending, sorry beginning for the children :) A divorce is already tough and loss of a mother is unimaginable. Good one!
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed the twist at the end. A happy ending. :]
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteLovely :) I want a home like that, someday.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I hope you get it someday :)
Deletesuicide is not the solution, beautifully written
ReplyDeletehttp://blogthepoint.blogspot.com/2014/08/luminous-smile.html
Thank you!
DeleteLeaves a strong impact! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Pooja!
DeleteThe heart of a mother :)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful in a manner !
Nicely done.. Good that she changed her mind!!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteKids make life worthwhile. Positive story, Soumya :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Anita! :)
DeleteOh, nice little twist at the end. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteWow, 5 liner story with depth and a cute end. I never knew such contests exist, thanks :)
ReplyDeleteYou are welcome :)
DeleteLife is all about making choices-good & bad....with faith & hopes.
ReplyDeleteNice narrative. Good wishes :-)
Thank you Ruchi! :)
DeleteNice title - Reason to live. It is their innocence and unconditional love that keeps a lot of people alive.
ReplyDeleteThank you Anita!
DeleteSoumya, My first comment disappeared, so here's a second one: I'm also glad that she changed her mind. The children need her. Well written. : ) ---Susan
ReplyDeleteThank you for coming back to check :)
DeleteI'm glad this had a happy ending - revenge of any kind doesn't ever really have the desired effect...
ReplyDeleteI agree. Thanks :)
DeleteSoumya,
ReplyDeleteAbsolute truth. One has responsibilities towards children and can not leave them in lurch. Thanks for clarifying it is fiction as I was perturbed while reading it.
Take care
Fiction it was.
DeleteThank you for your concern Jack.
Oh, my heart just did a somersault! What a lovely way to blend the prompts. I especially liked your interpretation of Luminous :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Shailaja!
DeleteA second is all it takes, whether to destruct or to construct. The path is in our hands.
ReplyDeleteWhat a take on the prompt! Bravo!
ReplyDeleteA good decision for sure and here's wishing them all a beautiful life
ReplyDeleteBikram's
Thanks Bikram.
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