Surprise!


At the stroke of midnight
She sat on her bed wide awake
Her parents would come barging in
Carrying gifts and of course the cake

Holding her phone close to her heart
To receive the calls on the first ring
Patiently she sat with a wide smile
Wondering what this year would bring

Last year had been magical
All her dreams had come true
She hoped that this year would be better
In her mind, candles she blew

Five minutes passed and no one came
Could they have forgotten the date?
Not a call, not even a ping
For a little longer she decided to wait

Then it finally dawned upon her
What if she was in for a surprise
She rushed and opened her door
Hoping to be greeted with joyous cries

The room was dark and smelt different
She waited for the lights to come on
Instead a cloud of dust hit her
And then the darkness was never gone

Far away, her mother knelt slowly
Shedding a tear before Alma Mater
A year ago, on this very day
She had lost her only daughter


This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda.

~ Soumya

35 comments:

  1. Couldn't quite understand last para, are you writing on behalf of dead girl?

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    1. No. I'm writing as the third person.

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  2. This is so touching. very beautifully written . All the best for the contest.

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  3. This is sad but nevertheless beautifully written..
    The last para was unusual..

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  4. Really unusual , Loved the verse.

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    1. Nice to have you back after a long time :)

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  6. Well written. A little bit unusual, though.

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  7. Surprise; really it was..!!

    Everything seems so beautiful until the last few lines, which really pricks deep down the heart. Simply awesome, Soumya.

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  8. I don't know why, I couldn't stop thinking about that ghastly fire in which many school children were trapped and succumbed to the burns. Also, this poem reminded me of something I read long back.. They say children don't realize they are dead and sometimes don't cross over :(

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    1. Ohh now that makes me really sad :(

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  9. Ghost!

    I don't know what kind of response would you want to elicit from readers after reading this, but I kind of felt sorry.

    Nice read.

    Blasphemous Aesthete

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    1. Unusual and pain was the intent.

      Glad you liked it :)

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    1. Thank you. Glad that you're back :D

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  11. I loved this. I always love a twist in the end. :-)
    It was sad though.

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    1. Thank you! Poignancy was intentional.

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  12. I really enjoyed reading this! Wonderful post.

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  13. As usual a good post, but Sad ending... Liked the twist in the end.

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  14. Striking! Unexpected ending.
    Very nicely written Soumya!

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