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His Eyes


"I love you", he said before leaving.

I stood motionless, quietly watching the pain in his eyes. I don't know why he came here everyday. Who was he? They said I was suffering from amnesia, but how could I not remember the fact that I loved him. Even his eyes don't seem to help me.

~ Soumya
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  1. NabanitaMarch 20, 2014 at 7:59 PM

    Ohh this was a punch of intensity in a few lines !

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  2. BloggerWloggerMarch 20, 2014 at 8:17 PM

    Ouuch! I hope his eyes make her remember him all over again!

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  3. Midnight scribblesMarch 20, 2014 at 9:45 PM

    You're breaking my heart woman! :(

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  4. monicaMarch 20, 2014 at 10:23 PM

    Oops..
    Yet.. Eyes don't lie..:). If it was true she will remember it all eventually ;)

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  5. The EnchantressMarch 21, 2014 at 2:13 AM

    Soumya ..Hats off to you Darling :)

    You are a Terrific Writer.your words are sharp like a sword and they hit right at the Heart...Memerized by this one..Love all your Posts..All of them,,

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    1. SoumyaMarch 24, 2014 at 6:25 PM

      Oh wow, quite a comment that!

      Thank you so much for your kind words! :)

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  6. KeirthanaMarch 21, 2014 at 9:37 AM

    Life is cruel. His eyes will help her recover with time, that's the hope!

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  7. A FineappleMarch 21, 2014 at 10:33 AM

    I lurve these short stories of yours.. Oh and the long stories too. and the poems as well.. oh and those honest posts... :) :)

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  8. UnknownMarch 21, 2014 at 10:41 AM

    Ur just awesomee..!!!!! In any situation ..U know exactly how it feels. . So does yur writing !! :) :)

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    1. SoumyaMarch 24, 2014 at 6:27 PM

      Awww thank you dear Hema! Thank you so much for coming back every time :)

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  9. JoMarch 21, 2014 at 7:11 PM

    Sadly if she has dementia in one form or another, she won't remember. What a thump in the gut that was.

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    1. SoumyaMarch 24, 2014 at 6:27 PM

      We can only hope she remembers.

      Thanks for reading Jo.

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  10. AnonymousMarch 21, 2014 at 8:47 PM

    That was terrific!

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  11. Ridx March 23, 2014 at 12:54 AM

    Awesome. :)

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  12. SrinidhiMarch 23, 2014 at 11:30 AM

    These really short pieces break me :(

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    1. SoumyaMarch 24, 2014 at 6:29 PM

      And yet you come back every time. That's why I love you :)

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  13. Cubic Zirconia SapphireMarch 24, 2014 at 11:07 AM

    Awesome post .i hope everybody will like your post

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  14. Anita SabatMarch 25, 2014 at 10:40 AM

    So touching, Soumya. Just 55 words but the story lingers on...

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  15. Anmol RawatMarch 25, 2014 at 12:52 PM

    Reminded me of 'The Notebook' :)
    Heart felt and touching :)

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