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Look Closer

Copyright – Georgia Koch

When the man I loved abandoned me on my wedding day and my village banished me, I packed all my luggage and set off on my boat, to start a brand new life. I did not make it there though, my journey was cut short as I drowned in my feelings as well as in life. But I did not leave this earth, I sit here at this abandoned spot on my boat, planning my revenge. I just fell in love truly, madly and deeply; and I did not deserve an end like this. Look closer, you can see me.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Abandon' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 23rd January 2015.

Comments

  1. Ooops,,, Thats sad, grave and scary... All at the same time...
    And I agree that she didnt deserve so many hardships though!

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  2. I like that! A chilling love story :) Good one, Soum!

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  3. Soumya, that's powerful and soulful writing. Superb:)
    https://vishalbheeroo.wordpress.com/2015/01/23/five-sentence-fiction-a-perfect-strategy/

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  4. That's powerful and soulful writing:)

    https://vishalbheeroo.wordpress.com/2015/01/23/five-sentence-fiction-a-perfect-strategy/

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  5. Dear Soumya,

    Sad story with an ominous ending.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  6. Can I just say that I really looked closer to find you in the picture? Goosebumps, Soumya! Lovely one!

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  7. Oh! Such a sad story but so wonderfully written.

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  8. I second Shailaja! You made me look closer with your words. Good one Leo!

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  9. The last line is wonderful.. I forgot about her sadness for a moment.. No one deserves that.. and she is having to even wait for revenge!

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  10. Time to teach a lesson ... powerful and always :-)

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