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Copyright – Georgia Koch |
When the man I loved abandoned me on my wedding day and my village banished me, I packed all my luggage and set off on my boat, to start a brand new life. I did not make it there though, my journey was cut short as I drowned in my feelings as well as in life. But I did not leave this earth, I sit here at this abandoned spot on my boat, planning my revenge. I just fell in love truly, madly and deeply; and I did not deserve an end like this. Look closer, you can see me.
This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Abandon' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 23rd January 2015.
Ooops,,, Thats sad, grave and scary... All at the same time...
ReplyDeleteAnd I agree that she didnt deserve so many hardships though!
No one deserves to be jilted.
DeleteI like that! A chilling love story :) Good one, Soum!
ReplyDeleteThank you my dear :)
DeleteIt's a great story.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ranu!
DeleteSoumya, that's powerful and soulful writing. Superb:)
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Thanks Vishal!
DeleteThat's powerful and soulful writing:)
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Dear Soumya,
ReplyDeleteSad story with an ominous ending.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks for reading Rochelle!
DeleteCan I just say that I really looked closer to find you in the picture? Goosebumps, Soumya! Lovely one!
ReplyDeleteOh really? I'm glad :)
DeleteOh! Such a sad story but so wonderfully written.
ReplyDeleteThank you Reema!
DeleteI second Shailaja! You made me look closer with your words. Good one Leo!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteWhew! That sure was hard hitting.
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading! :)
DeleteThe last line is wonderful.. I forgot about her sadness for a moment.. No one deserves that.. and she is having to even wait for revenge!
ReplyDeleteTime to teach a lesson ... powerful and always :-)
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