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| Copyright-Rochelle Wisoff-Fields |
"I can't believe that you have turned my library into such a huge mess", my dad scowls as he looks around in disgust.
"Oh, come on daddy, this is exactly what I want to do with my life; make music and teach it to others, you know that", I say grazing the piano with my finger tips.
"So, this is your future?", he looks upset and disappointed.
"Yes daddy, I have this weird hunger within me, that only music can satiate. This is the hunger that comes from within my soul", I say as my dad smiles and walks away.
This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Hunger' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 10th October.
I like that smile in the end... I think she will get her father's support.
ReplyDeleteShe will.
Deletenice post! only such a hunger gives the world something that becomes a benchmark!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ankita!
DeleteI like how either she turned him round, or he was just testing her commitment. I think you might need to look at some of the tenses - the father's words seem to be in the past, but the narrator's in the present tense.
ReplyDeleteClaire
I have changed the tense now. Thank's for pointing it out.
DeleteSo glad that the Dad is understanding! :)
ReplyDeleteI know :)
DeleteWhat a shame some parents use such a heavy hand as their children try to fly. A sterling scene!
ReplyDeleteAh! Happy to see the dad walk away with a smile... he understands the hunger that encaptures the one surrounded by music.
ReplyDeleteI hope there are more fathers like him.
DeleteI love the last line! Seems like the dad figures that the music satiates his child like those books satiate his soul's hunger. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat story and I'm glad that her dad wants her to be happy - at least that's how I take it. Good job! Nan :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Nan :)
Deletegreat story nicely written
ReplyDeleteThe Performer
Thank you Cifar!
DeleteNice story. Here is my Friday Fiction. http://blogatcynthia.blogspot.in/2014/10/friday-fictioneers-let-light-in.html
ReplyDeleteThank you Cynthia.
DeleteNice story indeed.happy to see tha dad walk away with a smile.nicely written
ReplyDeleteLovely story..glad about the dad being understanding too! :-)
ReplyDeleteLovely.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteGood work. A common conversation between parent and child told with an understanding that makes me think you might have lived through a similar one.
ReplyDeleteOne note: I think you might mean "sate" instead of "satiate".
All my best,
Marie Gail
Thank you Marie. We can use either satiate or sate, it works the same.
DeleteTo each, his own... dreams.. :)
ReplyDeleteOh yeah! :)
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