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Feel It For Me


I know it is hurting every part of you, but I want you to feel the ache I am feeling in my heart. I want you to think of all the happy moments we spent together, those times when we sang and danced, those times when we smiled and laughed, those times when we kissed and made love, those times when we promised to stand by each other no matter what. Now, think of those times you took refuge in the arms of another man behind my back, the times when you told me a zillion lies, the times when you pulled yourself away from me. Can you feel the blood slowly leaving your body, baby?

Do not worry, in a while it shall all be over; just like you and me.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Ache' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

~ Soumya
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  1. BloggerWloggerFebruary 6, 2014 at 6:59 PM

    Heart wrenching revenge! You made justice to the revenge! :p Awesome

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  2. DJFebruary 6, 2014 at 8:37 PM

    Soumzzz! "Excellent" is the word honey!

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  3. Ranu 802February 6, 2014 at 9:44 PM

    Wonderful.

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  4. Red HandedFebruary 6, 2014 at 10:35 PM

    DAMN!!!!! NONONONONONONO
    This was bittersweet!! :D

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  5. HardiFebruary 7, 2014 at 2:17 AM

    You're on a roll Soumya!

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  6. Rose LeMortFebruary 7, 2014 at 3:39 AM

    Of course I've never actually done it but I've imagined doing it. Some of the guys I let into my life betrayed me badly.

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    1. SoumyaFebruary 7, 2014 at 12:29 PM

      You should do it. That's the only punishment for infidelity.

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  7. Ridx February 7, 2014 at 4:44 AM

    REVENGE! God this is so awesome. I like how you twist the stories and make them really interesting.
    And omg you update everyday YOU ARE AWESOME. Its so hard to keep a track of your posts. I salute you for keeping your blog alive and publishing almost everyday. You must be really good at managing time. All of the readers including me love you for that. <3

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    1. shabab khanFebruary 7, 2014 at 9:28 AM

      Ridx!
      Aren't you flirting by extoling?

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    2. SoumyaFebruary 7, 2014 at 12:31 PM

      Ridx, thank you my darling! I try my best to post everyday. Thank you so so much :)

      Lots of love!

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    3. SoumyaFebruary 7, 2014 at 12:31 PM

      Shabab, I'm not complaining! :)

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  8. RajlakshmiFebruary 7, 2014 at 5:05 AM

    Woaa that's pretty dark... Well written

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    1. SoumyaFebruary 7, 2014 at 12:33 PM

      Thank you! Most love stories have a hidden dark side to it.

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  9. Rupasi February 7, 2014 at 9:10 AM

    Beautiful Revenge!

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  10. Anita SabatFebruary 7, 2014 at 3:44 PM

    What an end, Soumya... over like the love-story.
    5 sentences that have a punch....

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  11. srinidhiFebruary 11, 2014 at 2:47 PM

    Wow.

    It killed me just reading it. I couldn't live it.

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