It had been a long time since I had thought about him, but today it was all about him. Every breath of mine smelt of him and his thoughts plagued my body and mind. We were inseparable five years ago, but now, we were tied to different people. I don't know why his thoughts refused to leave me today, as if soaking me and pulling me down to the past that I had pretended to have forgotten.
In a split second, everything within me froze, my soul in particular, when I flipped the page and saw his face in the obituary list.
This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Frozen' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
Truly chilling! Ah that last line and the suspense you create! *claps*
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ReplyDeleteStraight from the soul !!!
Thank you Veena!
DeleteMy heart skipped a beat. Superb!
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DeleteIt's so amazing that I went back and read again!
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DeleteI always look forward to your last line :)
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Deleteomg this is so touching. I wonder how am I going to feel if I read an obituary of a person I used to be friends with. Its just so sad!
ReplyDeleteAnd what about the obituary of a person you once loved? It would kill me too.
DeleteTruly beautiful!!!
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DeleteOh God, this is scary and sad ... the twist at the end, it left me spell-bound !!!
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DeleteWell done!
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