Frozen


It had been a long time since I had thought about him, but today it was all about him. Every breath of mine smelt of him and his thoughts plagued my body and mind. We were inseparable five years ago, but now, we were tied to different people. I don't know why his thoughts refused to leave me today, as if soaking me and pulling me down to the past that I had pretended to have forgotten. 

In a split second, everything within me froze, my soul in particular, when I flipped the page and saw his face in the obituary list.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Frozen' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

~ Soumya

28 comments:

  1. Truly chilling! Ah that last line and the suspense you create! *claps*

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    1. This is so sweet of you! Thank you :)

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  3. Short and sweet
    Straight from the soul !!!

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  4. My heart skipped a beat. Superb!

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    1. Thank you Nisha! I'm so glad you liked it :)

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  5. It's so amazing that I went back and read again!

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  6. Nice one...again! ( I am so tired of writing the same comment over and over. But believe me I am genuine when I say it)

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  7. I always look forward to your last line :)

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    1. Well I always try to do something different! :)

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  8. omg this is so touching. I wonder how am I going to feel if I read an obituary of a person I used to be friends with. Its just so sad!

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    1. And what about the obituary of a person you once loved? It would kill me too.

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  9. Oh God, this is scary and sad ... the twist at the end, it left me spell-bound !!!

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