The Wishing Well

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"Oh you believe in all this?", I asked Naman as he walked me towards the wishing well, in the middle of the jungle.

"No harm in trying right", he smiled as he handed me a coin and asked me to close my eyes to make a wish.

I closed my eyes and wished that Naman would forgive me for 'that' mistake. I did not intend on cheating on him, just that I was really drunk that day and Sahil happened to drop me home.

Before I could complete my wish, I felt Naman's hands on me pushing me into the well.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Wishes' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

50 comments:

  1. Gold Soumz! Ur blog and I are inseparable :)

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  2. that was really interesting, pacy and dark! the ending was superb!

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  3. Oh my god! Soumya, you vixen! I never saw that coming. In my heart, I was praying that she would be forgiven and then that dramatic twist! You took my breath away. Well done!

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  4. this was awesome. well deserved.

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  5. The end was totally unexpected.
    I was actually expecting to see--
    Before I could complete my wish, I felt Naman's hands on me in a protective way and assured me, “Don’t worry so much about an accident. Just forget it as if it was a bad dream.”

    Soumya, you like to take people on a roller coaster ride. Don’t you? ;)
    You really have a way with feelings ! :)

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  6. OMG! You have managed a twist in the end and this is a surprise.

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  7. Unexpected... But a very good read :)

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  8. Gosh! Soumya, you never fail to surprise me! What a twist :)

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  9. Ooh!!! It did manage to terrify me in the end!!

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  10. Makes me wonder, what if she's had the time to complete her wish? ;)
    I love the twist though. Brilliant!

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  11. aah that was something i didnt see coming!! naman should have listened to her! good one soumya :)

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  12. I guessed the climax ;) good one as always.

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  13. Oh my God.. didn't expect THAT twist! Forgiveness for cheating is one of the most debatable topics though.

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    1. Debatable yes. But I would never forgive a cheat. I'd do what Naman did.

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  14. Hmm...Kinda deserved... Nice write up.

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  15. What a twist! Awesome as usual :-D A Liebster awaits you on my blog http://reemadsouza.blogspot.in/2014/06/and-here-is-second-liebster.html :-D

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    1. Thank you for the comment and the award! :)

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  16. wow!! Nice take on the prompt Soumya.. :D

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  17. Thought so, somethings are hard to let go. Nicely portrayed :)

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  18. Oh.... :( Somehow I expected forgiveness, despite knowing fully well that she deserved what she got... A wonderful twist you gave :)

    (Btw, could u pls check your spam inbox....had mailed you some days back).

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    1. Thank you Sreeja!

      Just checked my Spam folder now, and there is your mail. Yayyyyy!! Thank you so so much :)

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  19. Oh...my it's just too good....a complete different end to what I expected :)

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  20. That ending! Woah :) Really good! Always a pleasure to read your stories!

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    1. Thank you! Nice to see you here after long :)

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  21. oh my god.. but WHy.. its better to move on then do this to another human being ..

    but the twist in the post .. Loved it :)

    Bikram

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