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| Copyright – Kelly Sands |
There was sunlight when you left and now the clouds above have given up too, just like me. Sometimes I wonder if I gave up too soon and then I think maybe not, since the decision to leave was solely yours. You wanted to go out and explore a new world, of which I clearly wasn't a part of, atleast that's what you proved when you left me with just a note. Today it doesn't hurt so much, as I have come to realize that I am worth more. Your name lies faded in some old page of my life.
This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Pages' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 11th July.
Time heals everything, give it some time :)
ReplyDeleteGreat composition :D
Thank you! :)
DeleteOh my God, Soumya, when I saw the prompt for FSF, I had something like this in my mind. :p Good one babes :)
ReplyDeleteGreat minds, think alike :)
DeleteBeautiful Soumya :)
ReplyDeleteTime is a healer :)
the writer is obviously coming to terms with the breakup - well written.
ReplyDeleteA small point - you wrote 'of which I clearly wasn't a part off'' - which is one 'off' too many! :)
Thank you!
DeleteAnd thank you for pointing it out, I have corrected it now :)
Awesome as always! Your stories are simple but are so beautiful and I love that!
ReplyDeleteThank you Reema!
DeleteIt's incredible how you connect the simple word like page to such a creative tale. Commendable. Hats off!
ReplyDeleteThank you so so much!
DeleteHi Soumya, I'm certainly not the first to give you this award, but here's something from me :)
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Thank you so much Aathira. You have been very kind :)
DeleteA nice poetic take on the prompt. Good job.
ReplyDeleteGive the time, some time :)
ReplyDeleteWell written :)
Thank you Aayesha :)
DeleteGood one Soumya...we move on with the time.
ReplyDeleteThank you Janu!
DeleteThis is excellent. Really stirs the soul.
ReplyDeletestunning as alwez how have u been ?
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteI have been good, how are you?
Thank you! :)
ReplyDeleteGreat post
ReplyDeleteThis is simple, yet so indulging! I love how you can bring emotions out in the reader :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! :)
DeleteNice.. Simple yet so beautiful.. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Anu :)
DeleteImpeccable beautiFICTION ! :) Soumya, you have a special knack of creating beautiful magic with your fiction. I loved the words and the last line especially was awesome.
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad! She deserved someone better :) You have done a fabulous work, as always, in expressing the character's thoughts so beautifully.
ReplyDeleteThank you Aathira! :)
DeleteJust a note? Well, then goodbye and good luck.
ReplyDeleteOh yeah, you bet!
DeleteThese few lines spoke it all ....beautifully expressed .....loved it :)
ReplyDeleteSweet and simple. Very well done.
ReplyDeleteNice piece... but what went wrong that she only left a note? was she that immature - and did you not wish to see who she really was? It is not that deep a wound. Let the clouds be your guide as sunny days return anew.
ReplyDeleteI'm feeling a little philosophical.... got any m and m's? Randy
You probably did not get the story right. He left her without telling her anything. He just left a goodbye note, it sure is a deep wound.
DeleteSoumya, Well written. At least she's now put that terrible hurt in her past and is moving on which is a sign she's healed. Good for her. Good story and well done. :) ---Susan
ReplyDeleteThank you Susan :)
DeleteThis made me a fan of yours! Too good.
ReplyDeleteAww, you are sweet! Thanks :)
DeleteVery nice Soumya
ReplyDeleteTina from The Sunny Side of Life
Thank you Tina!
Delete'Your name lies faded in some old pages of my life' ...very nice...bad experiences should indeed be erased.:)
ReplyDeleteEasier said than done :)
DeleteLoved how you connected the two prompts in one! Beautiful Leo!
ReplyDeleteGood that the bad memory has faded away :) Your females are very strong, Soumya :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Sreeja! :)
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