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Drift


Boring talk
Love is lost some where
We both drift

We both drift
Far from each other
With eyes closed

With eyes closed
We choose to ignore
Our problems

Our problems
Not larger than "us"
Yet we drift

Written for Haiku Horizons: Prompt - Drift.

Comments

  1. That was touching. There are some distances that can't be bridged :( And what a lovely take on Haiku!

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  2. Beautiful play of words and a superb imagination!

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  3. One of the pillars of a strong marriage - talk about your problems.

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  4. I get your drift :) hehe I like the wordplay here!

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  5. That was brilliant.. 'yet we drift'

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  6. The last Haiku is simply brilliant Soumya, marriage is all about bridging you and me with us indeed.

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  7. If only they spoke it out...
    This was lovely!

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  8. Lovely pattern and the plot took it off beautifully.

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  9. With eyes close, we choose to ignore our problems...some times we do it with our eyes open too. Lovely set of Haiku.

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  10. Hmm... This has got me thinking...
    Its true though! No fights or problems or whatever there is, is bigger than the person / couple themselves and can be solved... holds true for every relation actually...

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    1. Absolutely! Nothing is bigger than the couple themselves.

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  11. plain truth woven with sublime words ! awesome Soumya !!!

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  12. Beautiful :)
    Short and Crisp.
    Loved how you repeated the last line in every start of the next stanza :)

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