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Forever Means Forever

Image: Copyright -Jennifer Pendergast

They walked hand in hand, enjoying the cool summer breeze as they were in this city after a really long time and that too on a special day. Their walking sticks made sharp noises in unison, just like their footsteps as her white hair gently blew over his face. Their faces shone with love and admiration for each other, which froze in a second and they stopped together. In front of them stood a huge mansion, instead of the cathedral where they had got married sixty years ago.

Everything around them had changed, apart from their love for each other.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Marriage' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 30th May.


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  1. S.May 29, 2014 at 6:25 PM

    I so loved it :)

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  2. AathiraMay 29, 2014 at 6:30 PM

    That was beautiful ! True love does exist after all :)

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  3. Reema D'souzaMay 29, 2014 at 7:19 PM

    Awesome! A beautiful take on the prompt :)

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  4. UnknownMay 29, 2014 at 7:24 PM

    Nice take on the prompt...a rarity of the present generation.

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    1. SoumyaMay 30, 2014 at 3:07 PM

      Thank you Janaki. I know, forever word hardly exists in the youngsters dictionary these days!

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  5. Midnight scribblesMay 29, 2014 at 7:40 PM

    Aah beautiful! :)

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  6. NishaMay 29, 2014 at 9:59 PM

    Like a fairytale :)

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  7. S.K. DuboisMay 29, 2014 at 10:10 PM

    Sweet! A very pleasant picture. We should all be so lucky.

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  8. Shailaja VMay 29, 2014 at 11:42 PM

    I loved the picture of the couple but was saddened by the loss of their place of love. Nice blending of the prompts, Soumya!

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  9. ShaiviMay 29, 2014 at 11:43 PM

    So romantic!

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  10. VinatiMay 30, 2014 at 12:13 AM

    Sigh.. such pure love. :')

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  11. UnknownMay 30, 2014 at 3:19 AM

    This is so cute! I love how you've portrayed their love as strong as ever despite the changes going on around them. Exactly how it should be! :-)

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  12. AnanyaMay 30, 2014 at 4:14 AM

    Good one, enjoyed reading it
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  13. Red HandedMay 30, 2014 at 10:21 AM

    OLD COUPLES make me believe in love that lasts a lifetime.

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  14. LocomenteMay 30, 2014 at 1:17 PM

    Really lovely... Full of love!

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  15. Rupasi May 30, 2014 at 3:09 PM

    I loved it!!! <3

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  16. cubic zirconia baguetteMay 30, 2014 at 3:21 PM

    Awesome post, thanks for sharing this post..

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  17. cubic zirconia brazilMay 30, 2014 at 3:22 PM

    Nice post, i hope everyone will like your post..

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  18. ParvathyMay 30, 2014 at 10:51 PM

    I could see them as I read your words. Walking hand in hand. Yeah. I loved this post too much :)

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  19. the little princessMay 31, 2014 at 9:04 AM

    that's the most important thing....it would be sad if it would have been the other way round....

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  20. Anita SabatMay 31, 2014 at 11:21 AM

    A new mansion in place of the Church! Lovely story, Soumya :)

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  21. UnknownMay 31, 2014 at 1:08 PM

    You do MAGIC ALWAYS

    enchantress here

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  22. Lisa ShambrookMay 31, 2014 at 8:27 PM

    Lovely and uplifting, change is always about us, but love can guide us through it!

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  23. NamrataMay 31, 2014 at 8:38 PM

    Love is timeless evergreen...:)

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  24. brudbergMay 31, 2014 at 9:25 PM

    Good to know that they still had each other.. cathedrals might crumble and mansions grow.. but love still remain.

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  25. Donna BurmanMay 31, 2014 at 10:05 PM

    Cute and romantic!! :D

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  26. Donna B. McNicolMay 31, 2014 at 10:22 PM

    Sweet, sweet tale...

    Very interesting take on a different type of marriage.

    D.B. McNicol
    Romance & Mystery...writing my life

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  27. Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsJune 1, 2014 at 5:36 AM

    Dear Soumya,

    Nice to know there are still people who stay married til death parts them. Sweet.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  28. DawnJune 1, 2014 at 8:37 AM

    Very sweet.

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  29. AnonymousJune 1, 2014 at 5:19 PM

    Soumya, Lovely story. Just about everything's already been said. I agree with the positive comments about lasting love even though changes take place. Well written. : ) ---Susan

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  30. kalpana solsiJune 1, 2014 at 8:16 PM

    Love ripening with age. so sweet.

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  31. Rohan KachaliaJune 2, 2014 at 2:29 PM

    Lovely!!

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  32. The Side I HideJune 2, 2014 at 3:54 PM

    So sweet this is. :)

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  33. AnonymousJune 2, 2014 at 5:29 PM

    Aww, a lovely last line. This is how my grandparents were and I wish it were true more often for the younger generations.

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  34. KeirthanaJune 2, 2014 at 6:24 PM

    Yes indeed. A forever means forever :) This was a different route than the one you often take and I enjoyed it :) The focus was more on the features of the scene rather than the characters themselves. That made it different :)

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  35. UnknownMay 29, 2016 at 2:57 PM

    I like this post :)

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