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How innocent she looked as she slept, her long black hair gracing the pillow effortlessly. Made him feel more guilty, as he thought about his mistress and the times he had spent with her instead of his beautiful wife, who had never complained. That evening, after ending things with his mistress, he came home with a bunch of roses and a basket of blueberry muffins, his wife's favorite. Instead of her, he saw a note on the bed, written in his wife's handwriting that she is leaving him for another man. He wished he knew then, what he knew now.
This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Innocence' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.
This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Write Tribe: 100 words on a Saturday.
Wow what a crazy turn of affairs!!!
ReplyDeleteLoved this one.
Thanks Red!
DeleteWow! What a take on the prompt! Wonderful.
ReplyDeleteThank you Reema!
Delete//He wished he knew then, what he knew now.// What a crisp expression, a lot could have been different if only he had known. Good one :)
ReplyDeleteThank you darling! :)
DeleteBowled over! Nice :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Sahiti! :)
DeleteWhoa! Your fiction leaves this inexplicable impression!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteIronic. But such is life... Loved it Soumya :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! Yes, life is ironic at times :)
DeleteHe finally had to pay for his infidelity!
ReplyDeleteYes he did!
DeleteWhen people dont deserve innocence and purity this is what nature does to even out things !
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely right!
Deleteserves him right!! better late than never doesn't apply to everything!!
ReplyDeleteYou have combined the two prompts effortlessly. :) Love it!
ReplyDeleteWhat goes round comes around....nice one Soumya.
ReplyDeleteThank you Janu!
DeleteThis was actually a great ending - they all lived happily ever after :D
ReplyDeleteHahaha yes. But we need to see if the mistress would take him back! :P
DeleteAhh, too late for him :)
ReplyDeleteOh yeah :)
DeleteServes him right :(
ReplyDeleteSure does.
DeleteWhat a twist to the tale! A great take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteThanks Usha!
DeleteTit for tat! Serves him just right :).
ReplyDeleteIndeed :)
DeleteLoved it Soumya, nice one.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteGosh!! Serves him right, actually! :)
ReplyDeleteI agree! :)
DeleteHe was a little late. Serves him right to lose her. ♥
ReplyDeleteTotally agree! :)
DeleteLol I don't feel sorry for him. I'm glad she walked away and moved on.
ReplyDeleteI am glad too!
DeleteAh, she did the correct thing !!
ReplyDeleteOh yeah she did!
DeleteBunch of roses and basket of blueberry muffins.... sigh, the imagery!! The alliteration is perfect and I was taken back to my Enid Blyton days <3
ReplyDeleteI'm glad! <3
DeleteOkay he totally deserved that. And a perfect blend of prompts must say. Brilliant!! :D
ReplyDeleteThanks Anu! :)
DeleteInnocence + Adultery = Bad combo
ReplyDeleteCouldn't agree more!
DeleteA tit for tat thing. Lovely write :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Rohan.
DeleteLove how you combined the two prompts! And well, no one is really ever innocent, are they? ;)
ReplyDeleteNo one ever is. Thanks you PB :)
Deleteacha hi hua :)
ReplyDeleteBahut acha hua! :)
DeleteWhat goes around comes around. Brilliant!!!
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Thank you Pratibha!
DeleteHa, serves him right! You go, girl! This was lovely :D Popping over from Write Tribe and it is nice to find your blog :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Shailaja! :)
DeleteGood for her ! Why can't she find love , when he has sought it outside ? He received what he deserved !
ReplyDeleteExactly!
DeleteTit for tat! :P
ReplyDeleteOh yeah! :P
DeleteNo more guilty, then? The things some people do :)
ReplyDeleteGreat story as usual :)
Oh yeah! ;)
DeleteThanks Anita!
Oh! That's a tale with a twist! No guilt anymore and simply fab. I couldn't stop smiling:)
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