Fenced

Copyright - Mary Shipman

I could see that old building through the fence of my house. The neighbors said that no one lived there anymore, as the building was supposed to be torn down years ago and was left abandoned since then. I used to peer from my fence and try to look inside, through that broken window hastily covered by a card board. I could hear noises come from the building throughout the day, but no one else could hear the commotion. And no one believed me either, when I told them that everyday a face stares back at me from that window.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Fence' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

This drabble (100 word fiction) is written for Friday Fictioneers, 20th June.

44 comments:

  1. Oh dear.. That face staring part gave me the goosebumps..

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  2. that was a good scary piece! interesting read and i loved it!!!

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  3. I love reading these kind of stories <3

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  4. God! The end was eyes-popping! Loved it! :)

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  5. Scary! Got spooked out reading this one!

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  6. Beautiful..gave me goosebumps..I loved the way you combined the two prompts into a single post :-)

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  7. Definitely makes you want to know more of the story!!

    D.B. McNicol
    Romance & Mystery...writing my life

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  8. I like the plot. But maybe you could have ended it with a punch or something. I mean I don't know! You are a master at this. I just felt that it had a weak ending.

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    1. Aye aye madam. Will try something better next time :)

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  9. Very well written! So, you have five sentences And a photo prompt which developed into a wonderful, scary story! Good job! Nan :)

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    1. Thanks! Please login to comment next time :)

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  10. Reminds me of the movie "The Sandlot" and the old man who lived next door. :-)
    Well done!

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  11. This is so spooky ! Well done Soumya!

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  12. Creepy, reminds me of the Yellow Wallpaper almost.

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  13. I was torn between 2 endings -whether it's a creepy one or a sad one meaning someone is house arrested that way without anyone's knowledge.

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    1. I'm so glad that you actually got what I intended. I left it at an open end, for people to assume.

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  14. Soumya, Definitely chilling. It stands alone well, but would also be a great beginning for a longer story. Well written. : ) ---Susan

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  15. Oh! this is spooky and I love this genre. well-written.

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  16. I just saw that face, seriously :D
    I don't know why, but I was reminded of instances when I used to see faces on clouds, and wonder why no one else saw them :)
    Beauitful narration, Soumya :)

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    1. I used to do that too. See faces on clouds :)

      Thank you Sreeja! :)

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  17. This one raised the gooseflesh on my skin! Well done! Good combining of the prompts.


    Shailaja/The Moving Quill

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  18. I like spooky stories, and really liked this one..
    Hope you write a long spooky story.. :)

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