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Unfaithful


I was furious, my body was no longer in my control as my mind and soul seethed in anger. I was on the verge of killing, as I struggled to come to terms with myself and the truth in front of me. Of course I had a hint of suspicion, whenever he came home late and smelt of a woman's fragrance. Today, I saw him with his assistant, his hands all over her skimpily clad body. I stand quiet, clutching the knife tight, awaiting him, still unsure of whose body it will be plunged into.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic 'Furious' at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

~ Soumya
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  1. ShaiviMarch 11, 2014 at 5:52 PM

    So finally who did she go for? The hubby or the assistant?

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  2. kalpana solsiMarch 12, 2014 at 12:28 AM

    You have left it open for the readers . No she should not kill herself.

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  3. Red HandedMarch 12, 2014 at 9:50 AM

    I like the possibilities. Three possibilities. REVENGE!

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  4. DeepaMarch 12, 2014 at 9:55 AM

    She should hurt him where it would have hurt him the most, killing is too easy a death for a cheat

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  5. Anita Jeyan March 12, 2014 at 11:12 AM

    I think instead of killing the unfaithful its better she killed herself. That will not let them live in peace for the rest of their lives.
    If she kills one of them, then she will punish herself.

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    1. SoumyaMarch 12, 2014 at 2:23 PM

      She was a burden on him, with his new found love. His death will make it easier for him. Such cheats don't have a soul to feel guilt.

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  6. Anita SabatMarch 12, 2014 at 11:15 AM

    Last line is so chilling! In that moment she can take any decision...
    Touching story, Soumya. But, true for many...

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    1. SoumyaMarch 12, 2014 at 2:25 PM

      Very true for many. Thanks for reading, Anita!

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  7. KeirthanaMarch 12, 2014 at 11:31 AM

    The open end's a nice fit. The words are resounding with her fury.

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  8. the little princessMarch 12, 2014 at 2:28 PM

    that's so right....no one can predict what that moment of anger can make her do....her anger resonates so well in these few lines!

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  9. Robin Leigh MorganMarch 13, 2014 at 7:39 PM

    This is the first time I've done this since I first started to follow and respond to Lillie's FSF site. The most appropriate comment I can leave here is one I've left has my response to someone else's endeavor.

    "Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned" !!!

    Would love to read your comment for my endeavor this week,

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    1. SoumyaMarch 14, 2014 at 11:59 AM

      Thank you for reading Robin and you said it perfectly. Nothing like a scorned woman, believe me!

      Off to read your post now!

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  10. Midnight scribblesMarch 14, 2014 at 4:19 PM

    :( no no no. Not herself at least. Him yeah probably!

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  11. Pink Diary's Beauty SecretsMarch 16, 2014 at 10:24 PM

    Nice one. I guess she could kill his assisant and put the blame on her husband. Revenge :-P .

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  12. Ridx March 19, 2014 at 3:39 AM

    why do people have to cheat? Damn!

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